I know I am going to regret this
I know I am going to regret this
I know I am going to regret this, for sure
If I don’t get to see you anymore
…
Every word is a beginning
Every word is a beginning
Every word is a beginning of a war
If I don’t write to you anymore
…
It won’t be a home
It won’t be a home
It won’t be a home behind this door
If you don’t grace this place anymore
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I will never be the same
I will never be the same
I will never be the same as before
If you are not here with me anymore
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You will need to save me
You will need to save me
You will need to save me and more
I can’t go on like this anymore
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I can’t go on like this anymore
I can’t go on like this anymore
I can’t go on like this anymore
I just can’t go on like this anymore
Dear Frank who are the people? I liked Not Myself Anymore but this is not so poetic as it is common place. Where you writing this or singing it in your head? My life started at 8 years old and I have been a Seer ever since. I write from me but not alwsys for me. Being obcessed with someone is not a very inspirine muse. As for repetition, try a 2, 3 or 4 count. A1count is what bad song writers do not poets. The heart of what you are expressing is well felt but your repetitiveness distracts me. If I did not feel the potential of your words I would not have made this effort.
Thank you for sharing
Reachmewalter
( Walter Latif )
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Thanks for the suggestion. Take care. And have a nice day
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Continue your war!
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I will. Forever will
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Powerful!
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Thank you
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I love the repetition and rhyme scheme, how it all feels like dwelling constantly on the same thought, good use of style 🙂 I’ll have to try it myself now ;p
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Thanks. I’d love to see what you come up with.
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now compose some nice music to these words ☺
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I wish I could do that
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Nice rhyming
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repetition of lines create a vibrant mood despite of the sad thought…
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